It’s Been Too Long (And I’m Too Lazy) To Count The Weeks
Hi! It’s me again, back with another writing update! During my unspoken hiatus (more like toward the end of it), I did a lot of writing. It was mostly trying to figure out Raven and Tobias and changing the atomic structure of the stories (okay, it wasn’t that bad, but I still changed a lot on both), but you still deserve an update. Because it’s been over a month. 🙈
So, since there wasn’t much actual writing going on, I’ll be comparing the old version to the new version of each novel (without spoiling, of course). Here we go!
La Comparaison (That’s French for The Comparison)
The Raven and the Sparrow
Difference #1: Background
Version 1: Raven, Sparrow, and their parents are not Christians and not religious.
Version 2: Raven and Sparrow grew up in church.
Difference #2: Sibling Rivalry
Version 1: Raven and Sparrow have been fighting since they were three years old for no real reason.
Version 2: Raven and Sparrow have only been fighting for four years, and Raven started the whole thing to look cool in front of his friends.
Difference #3: Raven’s Lie
Version 1: Raven’s Lie is that everything can and will stay the same (wow I’m glad I solved that problem XD)
Version 2: Raven’s Lie is that rebellion is cool.
Difference #4: Charity
Version 1: The ship cruise is a non-religious charity for troubled youth.
Version 2: The ship cruise belongs to a Christian organization that owns both a boys and a girls home for troubled youth.
I think that’s all for this one. These changes have definitely made the story infinitely better. But I’ve been thinking about the title, and I don’t really think it fits the book. If you have any suggestions for a better title, let me know in the comments.
Difference #1: Occupations
Version 1: Tobias, Tiger, and Gideon either are or will become pirates.
Version 2: Tobias, Madison (A.K.A. Tiger), Gideon, and Mason are captured by pirates and made slaves to them.
Difference #2: Team Members
Version 1: The main protagonist is Tobias, and the supporting characters are Tiger (who is somewhere around 10) and Gideon (who is an adult but I didn’t ever figure out his actual age).
Version 2: The main protagonist is Tobias, and the supporting characters are Madison (A.K.A. Tiger, 18), Gideon (still no precise age yet but still adult), and Mason (21).
Difference #3: Tobias’s Lie
Version 1: Tobias’s Lie is… Um… Spoilery, and also not that great. Partly because it’s spoilery.
Version 2: Tobias’s Lie is the most important thing in life is happiness and comfort because God doesn’t exist so life has no real meaning.
Difference #4: Madison’s (Tiger’s) Lie
Version 1: Tiger’s Lie is nonexistent.
Version 2: Madison’s Lie is when someone wrongs you, you may rightfully take revenge on the transgressor.
Difference #5: Tobias’s First Action in His Dream
Version 1: When Tobias wakes up, he’s laying in some undecided place on land. He meets an elderly woman and talks with her.
Version 2: When Tobias wakes up, he’s on a ship. Mason finds him and accuses him of being a stowaway.
And that’s all the significant differences I can think of. I’m really hyped for this story especially, I can’t wait until I start (I’m starting it in NaNo)!
And Now for the Snippets!! (You’re Not Allowed to Skip These)
Tobias believes (mostly unconsciously) that the most important thing in life is happiness and comfort because God doesn’t exist so life has no real meaning. When he’s faced with a trial or a storm in his life he doesn’t take it well and begins to complain to himself in his head. Why is this happening to me? What did I do to deserve this? How can people be so stupid? If a god exists, why would it put people through things like this? Those are the things that tend to go through his mind during a difficult time.
Raven believes that rebellion is cool. He’s been taught all his life that this is wrong, but awhile ago he started getting involved with some rebel kids who laughed at him because he was afraid to get drunk or whatever dumb thing they wanted him to do. So to prove he wasn’t “old-fashioned and lame” anymore, he began to force himself to hate Sparrow and be a jerk to her. Eventually she was a jerk back, and now it’s developed into this huge pointless war.
Madison believes (very adamantly) that when someone wrongs you, you may rightfully take revenge on the transgressor. She does not easily forgive and she has serious anger issues.
Body type / Build: Sorry, what?
Facial description: How am I supposed to do this?
Prominent features or distinguishing marks: SERIOUSLY. WHY U MAKE DIS SO HAWD.
[**cough, cough** cry for help **cough, cough**]
Favorite phrases: …
Character Profiles for Lost Memories (I Don’t Have Them for The Raven and the Sparrow, Sorry)
Some of you may have noticed that my blog has changed yet again. I changed it because the last theme, although I liked it, wasn’t working well. I wanted to have a header picture of a notebook like I do now, but I couldn’t set it on the previous theme, and besides that there were other things that annoyed me about it. So here we are with this theme, my final choice (hopefully)!
The theme wasn’t the only thing I changed, though. I’ve been updating my pages lately (namely, my About Me page, my Next Projects page, and my Current Projects page), and I added a few widgets to my sidebar and footer.
The first widget has been there for awhile, but it’s a little “Hello” blurb. The second one has been there since the beginning; that’s my pages. The third is a reminder not to steal any of my ideas, the fourth is a little announcement thingy that’ll get updated quite a bit, and finally there’s a search bar. And at the bottom there’s a thing for the most recent comments. (It says Look Who”s Talking in the title because for some reason the apostrophe wouldn’t work.)
Anyhow, that’s all I have for today! My next post isn’t predictable, but I will definitely post on Tuesday, so stay tuned!
Oh, and P.S.
I recently made a sad decision. I had to shelve The Wolf and the Moon. If you forgot why or didn’t see the post, all is explained here.